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Posted: July 17, 2010 06:34 pm  | |||||||
      IRC Nickname: His Lordship Group: Founder Posts: 6029 Member No.: 1 Joined: December 26, 2007 Total Events Attended: 129    | Well... this sucks. I'm His Lordship, leader of the Wilderness Guardians, and I have the ridiculous task of describing my legendary clan on this tiny sheet of paper. Well, here goes nothing. Think of any clan you know. My clan is all of that, and more. You're not going to find a clan with a more experienced leader (I founded WG in 2003), or one with as many events (100+ types of events and counting), and you definitely won't come across clans more famous than us. I mean, we have the best website of all clans, a T-Shirt, and we even received endorsement on Jagex's main page. We've been raising the standards of Runescape clanning since before this game became a hit, and we want to keep it that way. We know that when it comes to clans, bigger is better. That's why I'm asking you to take just five minutes of your time to check us out and join the family if you like what you see. Unfortunately, this sheet of paper is about to run out, so why don't you browse our award-winning website (www.wildernessguardians.com) and put our reputation to the test? __________________ That's the message that will go on this pen.  Please offer your edits and feedback on its effectiveness. I want to make the most out of my very limited space. Put every word under scrutiny. --------------------  | ||||||
Posted: July 17, 2010 06:35 pm | |||||||
| IRC Nickname: Group: Elite Guardian Posts: 7306 Member No.: 47 Joined: December 30, 2007 Total Events Attended: 343 | Don't think that many people can read German -------------------- July 5, 2007 - June 27, 2011 | ||||||
Posted: July 17, 2010 06:36 pm | |||||||
| IRC Nickname: His Lordship Group: Founder Posts: 6029 Member No.: 1 Joined: December 26, 2007 Total Events Attended: 129 | You're funny, especially because it's not German. Keep up the one-line replies. Eventually my patience will wear out and you'll be docked a massive chunk of post-count. -------------------- | ||||||
Posted: July 17, 2010 06:38 pm | |||||||
 IRC Nickname: Kung_man149 Group: Higher Guardian Posts: 1054 Member No.: 2111 Joined: October 30, 2009 Total Events Attended: 79 |
Lol, Joe for epic troll! But yea, That sound's good Gene. -------------------- Taken❒ Single❒ Mad✔ <+Mark``> i think the brothers GF is going into labour <+Mark``> I WANNA WATCH YU-GI-OH   | ||||||
Posted: July 17, 2010 07:34 pm | |||||||
 IRC Nickname: Indivi2you Group: Elite Guardian Posts: 5361 Member No.: 43 Joined: December 30, 2007 Total Events Attended: 623 | Looks like a good pen  All my pens suck shit, that one looks smooth and comfortable grip. Send me some  -------------------- The First, The Last, and the Only ~FLO Never say never, because limits, like fears, are often just an illusion. ~Michael Jordan      | ||||||
Posted: July 17, 2010 07:43 pm | |||||||
| IRC Nickname: [Randy] Group: Raid Leader Posts: 5065 Member No.: 16 Joined: December 29, 2007 Total Events Attended: 499 | looks good --------------------   | ||||||
Posted: July 17, 2010 07:46 pm | |||||||
 IRC Nickname: Sativas Group: Elite Guardian Posts: 2255 Member No.: 1305 Joined: August 29, 2008 Total Events Attended: 155 | Wonder how well all of that is going to fit. If it does it will be nice. --------------------  The Ultimate Skilling and Combat Badges Updated June 17th, 2011        | ||||||
Posted: July 17, 2010 07:48 pm | |||||||
 IRC Nickname: Lefty Group: Emeritus Posts: 3340 Member No.: 1055 Joined: June 30, 2008 Total Events Attended: 211 | Where is it going to say "Well this sucks"? I don't think that is too appropriate to get peoples' interest. --------------------      | ||||||
Posted: July 17, 2010 08:04 pm | |||||||
 IRC Nickname: Outlaw Group: Emeritus Posts: 558 Member No.: 2055 Joined: September 12, 2009 Total Events Attended: 95 | Lol you scared me at first.. You begining with well this sucks.. Shit. I think it'll get peoples attention, but not in a positive light at first.. --------------------  Join date : June 2006 Left : March 2007 Rejoined : October 2009 Original DG Member Completed Goals : 99 Cooking, 99 Fishing, 99 Strength, 99 Attack, 99 Constitution, 99 Defence, 99 Ranged  | ||||||
Posted: July 17, 2010 09:56 pm | |||||||
 IRC Nickname: Mr Glennfase Group: Emeritus Posts: 3064 Member No.: 39 Joined: December 30, 2007 Total Events Attended: 220 | Change the title, bro. HAI LORDY :> -------------------- That's Mr. Glennfase to you. Ex-Warlord/Council  | ||||||
Posted: July 17, 2010 10:13 pm | |||||||
 IRC Nickname: Gorgemaster Group: Elite Guardian Posts: 9840 Member No.: 3 Joined: December 26, 2007 Total Events Attended: 540 | It's good - i love those pens... I'm just worried that much of the writing (2 sentences) is taken up by you saying that you are about to run out of space. Surely the person reading it can see that, so you could put that space to better use? --------------------    | ||||||
Posted: July 17, 2010 10:28 pm | |||||||
 IRC Nickname: megajayson Group: Elite Guardian Posts: 9246 Member No.: 423 Joined: April 4, 2008 Total Events Attended: 216 | good plan. but you forgot to mention timezones and mention our history of smashing wars. also if you can, put a picture as the background, might make the writing bad, but it would be better --------------------  This is ten percent luck, twenty percent skill Fifteen percent concentrated power of will Five percent pleasure, fifty percent pain And a hundred percent reason to remember the name! 7th Highest Overall for Wars Attended. | ||||||
Posted: July 17, 2010 11:05 pm | |||||||
 IRC Nickname: Jenny Group: Emeritus Posts: 1967 Member No.: 19 Joined: December 29, 2007 Total Events Attended: 56 | If you can get all that on the pen, I think its a winner. Looks like a great pen, plus you being a pen person I think you giving them away means a little more. Thank you for once again putting yourself in all you do . --------------------   | ||||||
Posted: July 18, 2010 12:20 am | |||||||
 IRC Nickname: DG_Keanu Group: Council Posts: 4782 Member No.: 2033 Joined: August 25, 2009 Total Events Attended: 173 | Considering you said "paper", I assume it will be on the pouch pictured rather than on the pen itself? --------------------  [05:42] <+WG_Keanu> I think I got a semi just looking at the pic [05:42] <%kat> same | ||||||
Posted: July 18, 2010 12:43 am | |||||||
| IRC Nickname: Lefty Group: Emeritus Posts: 3340 Member No.: 1055 Joined: June 30, 2008 Total Events Attended: 211 |
The pen has a plastic banner wrapped inside of it that you can pull out to see that information. -------------------- | ||||||
Posted: July 18, 2010 12:46 am | |||||||
| IRC Nickname: DG_Keanu Group: Council Posts: 4782 Member No.: 2033 Joined: August 25, 2009 Total Events Attended: 173 |
Oh my god. I only just realised that. That is actually pretty awesome. -------------------- [05:42] <+WG_Keanu> I think I got a semi just looking at the pic [05:42] <%kat> same | ||||||
Posted: July 18, 2010 02:37 am | |||||||
| IRC Nickname: His Lordship Group: Founder Posts: 6029 Member No.: 1 Joined: December 26, 2007 Total Events Attended: 129 |
I thought it caught peoples attention really well. -------------------- | ||||||
Posted: July 18, 2010 02:52 am | |||||||
 IRC Nickname: Buzzard1985 Group: Emeritus Posts: 817 Member No.: 723 Joined: May 30, 2008 Total Events Attended: 52 | So you did choose to use those pens  glad I suggested it then . Sounds good Gene --------------------  - [99 / 99 Woodcutting] - [85 / 99 Fletching] - [82 / 99 Fishing] - - [14 / 24 Skills 70+] - | ||||||
Posted: July 18, 2010 02:57 am | |||||||
 IRC Nickname: Maths Group: Ex-Member Posts: 1855 Member No.: 54 Joined: December 31, 2007 Total Events Attended: 286 |
I concur. I find the lines about running out of space a good break up from "another" recruiting attempt. It kinda breaks down that barrier and introduces a 'human' aspect to something which they could just skim over + not really pay any attention to. --------------------  "Journeys are what brings us happiness, Not the destination." ~ Two time ex-raid leader of wg ~  | ||||||
Posted: July 18, 2010 03:24 am | |||||||
| IRC Nickname: Group: Elite Guardian Posts: 7306 Member No.: 47 Joined: December 30, 2007 Total Events Attended: 343 |
99% of people who play RS speak English. If it's not English you're only looking at everyone who's not American. Thanks for actually thinking about what I was saying though. -------------------- July 5, 2007 - June 27, 2011 | ||||||
Posted: July 18, 2010 03:38 am | |||||||
| IRC Nickname: Buzzard1985 Group: Emeritus Posts: 817 Member No.: 723 Joined: May 30, 2008 Total Events Attended: 52 |
Possibly the picture is in a different language and it's just showing what it would look like? Mm -------------------- - [99 / 99 Woodcutting] - [85 / 99 Fletching] - [82 / 99 Fishing] - - [14 / 24 Skills 70+] - | ||||||
Posted: July 18, 2010 03:40 am | |||||||
| IRC Nickname: Group: Elite Guardian Posts: 7306 Member No.: 47 Joined: December 30, 2007 Total Events Attended: 343 |
If it looks like a different language then there's still an issue Mm -------------------- July 5, 2007 - June 27, 2011 | ||||||
Posted: July 18, 2010 03:40 am | |||||||
| IRC Nickname: Harmony Group: Ex-Member Posts: 333 Member No.: 2281 Joined: June 4, 2010 Total Events Attended: 26 | I like it...I was going to point out a grammar correction until I realized I had had the page open all day and refreshed and it was fixed. I don't understand if you are being funny Joe, or you really think its not going to be in English. The pen in the picture is just an example from the site that sells the pens, not the one Gene is planning to buy. If you're kidding about the language stuff ignore me. -------------------- Hollow Fyre ~  ~ Lion Tamer ºO•-)•––––––––•(-• •°• °• oOHarmonyOo •°•°• •-)•––––––––•(-•Oº The Most Strongest and Influential Army | ||||||
Posted: July 18, 2010 12:03 pm | |||||||
 IRC Nickname: Anatcrafter Group: Emeritus Posts: 1419 Member No.: 69 Joined: December 31, 2007 Total Events Attended: 292 | I would try to steer away from using negativity in the description. I know you're trying to be engaging but it makes it sound like writing it was a strenuous task and that you really didn't want to do it from the first few lines. I had a go of writing it trying to use a bit of comedy and a movie reference which if they get it would suggest that the description is very honest. I also wrote it as if it was from someone else's perspective so it wasn't like we were trying to hard sell the clan to them. HAI2U!!! I'm a Rrrrrrroyal Blue Pen! I was asked by His Lordship, leader of the Wilderness Guardians to write a brief description of his historic and legendary clan on my small exterior wall. At first I was like "What the hell, this is going to look ridiculous when I have visitors over!" but then I remembered I was a pen and did not have any visitors.  Moving forward, I'd like you to think of any clan you know. The Wilderness Guardians are all of that and much more! You will not find a clan with a more experienced leader or one with as many unique and entertaining events. The Wilderness Guardians' website is by far the most flashiest of any I've ever seen! Also not to be topped by the clan T-Shirt AND JaGEx's endorsement of the clan recently on the main page! Since the clan's conception in 2003 they've been raising the standards of RuneScape "clanning" and are continuing to do so. When it comes to clans, bigger is better. So why not just take five minutes of your time to check them out and if you like what you see join the family like many other RuneScape players already have! Put their reputation to the test and check out their website at: WWW.WILDERNESSGUARDIANS.COMIt's a little bit longer, I don't know if that's a problem but that's how I convey what you wrote. --------------------  | ||||||
Posted: July 18, 2010 04:08 pm | |||||||
| IRC Nickname: Sum41xx Group: Emeritus Posts: 630 Member No.: 102 Joined: January 3, 2008 Total Events Attended: 0 | Definitely think what Anatcrafter has written is humorous but if you're handing these out at Runefest (I assume?) I would think you want it just a tad more professional. I think what you wrote Lordy is pretty good. There's no mistakes and it's simple and covers the key points about the clan.  EDIT: Bottom line they're both good though. --------------------   Proud WG member since December 2003 | ||||||
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