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My number one girl
By Da Mate Nate on 27/05/2008
"My Number One Girl"
She is strong but thinks she's weak
When she cries i want to weep
I never met this girl
But i have feelings for her
We talk alot got to know
know more about the other
She may say she has mistakes
But my number one girl has no mistakes
She is perfect in every way
She is strong but thinks she's weak
When she cries i want to weep
I never met this girl
But i have feelings for her
We talk alot got to know
know more about the other
She may say she has mistakes
But my number one girl has no mistakes
She is perfect in every way
By Abmanju on 28/05/2008
Hmm, You know, a bit of English Literature/Language can really spice this poem up.
It really depends who you're targeting this too.
If it's for a lover, and she's aged about 15, I think she'd be flattered kind of.
But to get a real meaning out of the poem, a real theme and stuff, you need to put more of the 'English' Toolkit in.
Such as a certain rhyme & rhythm, I cbf to analyse Poems anymore because I'm done with English, but more of the tools are fresh, like Alliteration, Assonance, Oxymoron, Symbols, Themes, metaphors, similes, all this stuff really makes a poem what it is =D.
~Abs
It really depends who you're targeting this too.
If it's for a lover, and she's aged about 15, I think she'd be flattered kind of.
But to get a real meaning out of the poem, a real theme and stuff, you need to put more of the 'English' Toolkit in.
Such as a certain rhyme & rhythm, I cbf to analyse Poems anymore because I'm done with English, but more of the tools are fresh, like Alliteration, Assonance, Oxymoron, Symbols, Themes, metaphors, similes, all this stuff really makes a poem what it is =D.
~Abs
By Mistah Vince on 28/05/2008
| QUOTE (Da Mate Nate @ May 27, 2008 06:29 pm) |
| I never met this girl We talk alot got to know |
Those two sentences are kinda contradictory, don't you think? :S
By pur3laugh on 28/05/2008
wow great poem!! So.. Am I that number one girl? lol jk. But well done.. I really like it. <3 
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